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【托福】托福满分作文模板到底该怎么用?
2017-09-29 07:07
来源:沈阳新东方
作者:小编
一个模板刚刚出现,有可能明天就有100个人在用了,你想想当考官看到100个人写出来的作文都用同样的开头的时候,他将会是什么情景。当然这里指的是国外的考官。国内的考官看到的时候可是很爽的,太棒了!又造出来一帮一模一样的学生,加分点明确,可以给分了!
当面对重重阻力的时候,很多人不禁产生了怀疑。我们是否应该使用模板?使用模板是否会导致低分?我们到底该用什么模板?其实答案很简单,模板应该用,必须用,大胆用!
但是有一个十分重要的前提性条件,那就是模板一定是要原创的!原创的?!开玩笑,我们这辈子从来就没自己思考过,一直都是老师喂到我们嘴里的!是的,这就是你一直咒骂中国式教育的起点。其实很多满分作文都是使用了模板,但是由于使用的十分之精巧,同时再加上是原创托福作文模板,因此连考官也拿他没有办法,人家写的就是棒吗!
OK,先来看两段例子!第一段是不好的例子,第二段是好的例子。
Nowadays, thanks to the development of Internet, we are exposed to a vast ocean of information. Some argue that so much information brings a great benefit to our life and study. But for me, the experience with surfing Internet leads me to believe that accessing much information cause more problems than it solves.
Perhaps no issue in this world is as significance to students as education. Despite various responses people may have on the topic concerning the issue regarding which thing should the education aim at. I, given the chance, prefer to endorse that preparing for careers should have primary consideration.
当看到第一篇文章的时候,已经没有了当初得的兴奋,因为这样的文章实在是太常见了!首先Nowadays这个单词是被无数老师推崇的“高级”单词。一直无法理解,为什么有的单词会更高级。然后thanks to节宾语,天呐!多么明显的模板!当我往下看的时候,我只能无意识的检查是否有语法错误,没有语法错误的话,我也就只能给个一般的分数就好了。
但是当看到第二篇文章的时候,初看觉得此文写得不错。用词准确地道,而且完全是自己完成没有模板,但是当我回头再一回味这篇文章的时候,惊讶的发现,这篇文章竟然也是由模板所出!首先Perhaps no issue in this world is as significance to students as education。看似平淡无奇,但是实际上Perhaps no issue in this world is as significance to就是一个模板,更厉害的是下一句!Despite various responses people may have on the topic concerning the issue regarding which thing should the education aim at.这么长的一句话,竟然只有最后3个单词不是模板!
然后再接下来,下一句的“given the chance, ”其实对于整句话来说根本就没有任何实际上语义的改变!但适当加进来之后,我们会感觉到非常的地道!这篇文章身上完全看不出半点模板的影子,为什么看不出作文模板的影子呢?就是因为这篇文章的模板是完全原创的,哪怕不是原创的,也是仅在小范围内流传的!而且这篇文章后面类似的妙手不计其数!
托福独立写作模版只是助你更快上手的,而不是拿高分的,高分托福写作一定是有自己的语言特色,希望大家可以通过我的模板总结出自己的模板,这样才能拿到高分的独立写作。
一、 托福独立写作模版的用法:结构篇
1、开头
Sample one(适用于有一些背景or有一个中心词而且编得出来那个quotation的所有情况(二选一,agree or disagree,除了个别);
On contemporary society(一般的背景)/ With the advent of the technologically advanced society (the information explosive era(与科技有关的背景),XX(中心词) serves as a catalyst for our future success/ XX is synonymous with knowledge and the road to success/XX plays an essential/increasingly important role in…/XX is enjoying an increasingly high popularity among people./很简单的一句背景 , However, people (universities, government, citizen, society, government,) are/is invariably faced with such a question/ can’t help wondering:改写题目1.Confucian (Yu Qiuyu, Mark Twain, William Shakespeare), (one of) the greatest and most influential Chinese philosophers (scholars, educators, writers, thinkers, statesmen), has insightfully commented, “___编____”I cling to an unshakeable belief that his comment gives the answer to this question:改写题目2.
Among countless factors which contribute to my position are following conspicuous ones(最后一定排比结尾,且如果字数够了这一句就不要).
要做的:想一句简单的背景+编一句名言+改写两次题目
Sample two:(如果sample one的名言编不出来或者不适合编如leisure time,就用下面的)
On contemporary society(一般的背景)/ With the advent of the technologically advanced society (the information explosive era(与科技有关的背景))/ On account of …,XX(中心词) serves as a catalyst for our future success/ XX is synonymous with knowledge and the road to success/XX plays an essential/increasingly important role in… /XX is enjoying an increasingly high popularity among people./ 很简单的一句背景( 如so…that…/not only…but also). However,when it comes to the choice between AA and BB/When asked about whether改写题目1, people get into a dilemma. According to my personality and experiences/As far as I am concerned/From my perspective, I cling to an unshakeable belief that改写题目2.以下最后决定怎样写:Among countless factors which contribute to my position are following conspicuous ones(最后一定排比结尾)/AA not only…but also(2)/There are various merits AA brings about, first of all, to…; secondly, to…;and lastly…(3).
要做的:想一句简单的背景+改写两次题目+总起(最后写)
2、分点一:分层论证
Basic to any understanding of the benefits we can get from
_______ is that__________/ First and foremost,
On one hand_________, On the other hand_________
Besides/ What’s more/ In addition.
这一段主要说理,在分论点里可以加一些小的例子细节,重点是要用一些精华句子!
3、分点二:举例论证
Further lending credence to my position is that____________
(简单阐述/例子字不够就多讲点废话)I can think of no better illustration than the example of(典型例子)/ A case in point is that(不是很典型)________,…..(例子见后面)
一句话总结例子:As a result,强调句/倒装句/表利弊的句型/反面论证如果没有会怎样
4、让步段:
Agree or disagree: Admittedly,_____,to some extent, may directly or indirectly ____ /has its undeniable detriments. For instance, _______
However, the valuable merits of_______ considerably overshadow the drawbacks/ on no account________./
二选一:Admittedly, BB also has certain merits which deserve some words here. For example, ____(字数不够就多讲点) However,BB 的缺点或AA也可以做到. Compared with AA, (which 可以总结所有优点或针对BB的一方面, )it pales.
5、结尾段:
Therefore, due to the above mentioned reasons, which sometimes correlate with each other to form an organic whole and thus become more persuasive than any single one of them(字不够了用), I reinforce my stand point that 改写题目3
Only via(by/through /with/when/after) ___can we__________;
only via(by/through /with/when/after) ___can we________;
and only via(by/through /with/when/after)___can we_______
Or It is A that...;it is A that...;and it is A that...(不好写或显得累赘就不要了)
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